something euclidean

cashing in a crit ticket under another guise. Sorry it took so long to get back to this, Eva! Touch-- This, bliss of tactile trust; I love the sound of ...

I used to read YA books by pulling the new but strange ones off the shelves - the books that looked like they'd been published a few years ago at ...

How? Try using different images. Try using stronger verbs and nouns. Instead of "walk," say "shuffle" or "traipse." Instead of "wish" perhaps use "invocation," "yen," or "hankering." See how much ...

This poem has potential to be fun to read, but it is too long, too confusing [not really in of itself, but it's hard to keep any idea straight with ...

I liked this when I read it for the contest and I like it now. The whole poem hinges on a dreamy kind of feeling; it seems like the atmosphere ...

I enjoyed reading this and I enjoyed how the voice behind this is different from a lot of these poems; it was more sedate and direct, light and dignified, maybe ...

The chess/politics metaphor is a good one, and it could work very well if you expanded it for this poem. Still, it's something that's been done before, so you might ...

Why are the feelings there? what are they like? Can you describe them, compare them to something, tell a story with these feelings? This is all very matter-of-fact and while ...

I think that all the pop culture stuff in bold is really distracting; all the names demand we pay attention to them and make meaning out of them, rather than ...

I don't really like poems that are all nature and things like this is, or it's so... hmmm I'm not sure of the word. They seem kind of purposeless, I ...

Hm... this poem had some really beautifully simple images, especially here: sometimes the stars sing songs; they sing of days hope had wings and sometimes the sky keeps secrets; never ...

Some more details would be nice, as Clau said; part of the appeal of this is that it's simple and straightforward, but you can still include detail and emotion without ...

The only obvious error in the iambic tetramater is that 'squirrel' has two syllables, even if you mostly say it 'squirl', so that it throws off the form a little ...

The beginning is beautiful; the first six or seven stanzas were very detailed and they made it easy to imagine this world and these people. The picture and the careful ...

This version of the rhyme scheme worked well, for all that couplets are difficult to do - they can sound singsongy at times, so well done [I didn't see the ...